…but when I looked behind me…
Today was the day the exam results would come out. I went to my emails and covered my screen so I couldn’t see my results. Then, slowly, I lifted my hand. On the computer screen the email said I.. passed!
“Mum! Dad! You won’t believe this!” I yelled from my room.
Silence.
“Mum? Dad?”.
Nothing.
“Um, I passed my exam?”.
I heard a voice “Yes, turn around, dear,”.
I turned around, but when I looked behind me, I couldn’t see anything.
But then, “SURPRISE!!!”.
My parents planned a surprise party for me. With my friends!
“Well done with your exams!”.
The link to our class blog is here.
Izzy
Hi Annabelle,
my name is Izzy and i really enjoyed reading your story. The context of the story was very relatable and I thought that was a great way to attract the reader. One thing for next is you could use a little bit less speech but other than that you did an incredible job. Keep up the good writing,
Izzy.
Annabelle
Thank you, Izzy